Okay, all my friends are being little asses and not helping me out here ... Can anyone help me revise my paper? And answer these simple questions ... (can be one word answers, whatever you want I just need them answered after reading my paper)


The topic of the paper is: "convince your audience why students should be encouraged to keep their home language when they go to school." (home language as in, the language they speak outside of a classroom whether it be ebonics, konglish, spanglish, or anything along those lines including actual ethnic languages"



1. Is this central thesis/idea stated clearly in the intro of this essay? What's the thesis?


2. Does each body paragraph begin with a clear claim/point? does each claim/point support or help prove the thesis of the essay?"


3. Is each claim/point illustrated with sufficient evidence and explanation? explain.


4. Does the intro provide enough general and/or background info about the topic? If not, what do you want/need to know before reading on?




Message me on AIM for the essay! I don't have microsoft word on my computer so I have to send it to you directly through aim.

AIM: LohemgeeL



Thanks ahead of time guys ... I am in dire need of assistance

 

lol i actually used edit and proofread do this for friends and some money (ex-english major here)

go e-mail or PM it to me and i'll get to it when i can. when do you need it by?

 

I'm planning to turn in the final draft tomorrow, but if you can edit it, I will turn it in on wed. it's already a couple days late ... and my professor takes off 2 points everyday. Might as well do the best I can and get a decent grade minus the 4 points or so, then do a bad one and get less points taken off

 

I'll do it, but I can't do it until tomorrow afternoon, so let me know if you decide to turn it in on Wednesday

 

awesome I will turn it in on wed.

 

Your school don't have a student learning center with people to help proofread? I remember just going there and nod along for a while and I get my paper all edited for me.

 

Dammit, do your own homework!

Send it to me on aim if it's complete, i'll take a look at it.

 

Thank God for my buddy Cliffnotes!

 

It's already finished -__- I just need those peer editing questions filled out and grammer corrections


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